Thursday, February 04, 2016

100 WC: "Ducks In A Row"

[The 100 Word Challenge rolls on with this week's word, Idea. This story is called "Ducks In A Row"]


"What brought this on?," he said loudly.

She hated when he said that. The very idea that single thoughts follow from single incidents, that any of her tears were brought on by anything short of an entire constellation of memories, thoughts, perceptions and feelings, felt insulting and patronizing. It was a masculine idea, Socratic, orderly, premise followed by conclusion derived from said premise, as unitary and singleminded as ducks in a row, and it made her feel crazy when he acted like this was the only way to think, the only way to live.

"You'll never understand," she spat back.

13 comments:

  1. You have solved the mystery of what a woman means when she says, "nothing's wrong." Use this power wisely.

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  2. Ha!! Yup. This! In fact, I spat those very words into the face of my husband, just the other day! Well, minus the spit, actually.

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  3. I need to show this to someone. If only... As Tara says... use this power wisely. Nicely done!

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  4. You are standing on dangerous ground, my friend. Well done for so eloquently going where so few men dare to go. :)

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  5. All these comments are causing a chuckle. Tread lightly, indeed! ;-)

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  6. So many things I could say, but then, I'd be giving away secrets.

    Well done!

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  7. Not even women understand women. They are one of the greatest mysteries in the universe. A bit like black holes, near death experiences and whatever happened to Lord Lucan. Enjoyed.

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  8. And, of course, she was right.

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  9. Its tough to understand women easy to love them

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  10. Oh how I loved this, the idea that nothing is just one thing.

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  11. If you put the shoe on the other foot so to speak, you just near-perfectly described my exhole in your male character!

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  12. Why doesn't he know what brought this on? How could he not KNOW?? He's got to go. If he doesn't know instinctively the myriad of life-stuff that begets tears, he's not the one.

    What a fun 100 words!

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