Tuesday, April 26, 2011

100 Word Challenge: Price Check

Velvet Verbosity's 100 Word Challenge recieves no Federal tax dollars. This week's word is "bathed" and my story is called "Price Check".






"Look," Karen wanted to say, nominally In Charge but really just In Charge Of Taking Blame, her face bathed in dirty blond hair from a rapidly unwinding bun, "my older kid thinks she's going to run away with her middle school boyfriend, my younger one thinks he's going to grow up to train Pokemon, and my new boyfriend hasn't called me in four weeks. My back hurts, my knees ache, and I can't afford my rent. So forgive me if I'm not paralyzed with guilt over the fact that Tide rang up at $5.99."

8 comments:

  1. and don't we just wish we could say that to an unappreciative customer? Way to get right into the heart of the matter. I like it.

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  2. Yeah, you got to the heart of the matter- perspective.

    Dig the scene. Good job.

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  3. Good scene...I can feel her frustration.

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  4. Testify sista! Wonderful read, I can feel her frustration too.

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  5. I wish I was standing in her line...I may get out without spending more than $50! LOL... stop in & read Bathed in the Light

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  6. LOL! Oh, how I wish I could say things like that to people. I seriously deal with stupid people so often. You just want to give them a slap upside the head!

    Great job!

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  7. Ah, if only we could say these things! Might just humanize our world. Very nice, thank you.

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  8. Ha! Don't we all have those moments that we'd just like to go off on someone with such wit and pointedness?

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