Tuesday, October 23, 2012

VV/TWC: "Slash"

[I decided to go double dutch this week. This story, "Slash", is submitted to Velvet Verbosity's 100 Word Challenge for the word "distancing", as well as my triplicate obsessed friends at the Trifecta Writing Challenge, for the word "sinister".]














Elisa worked her pocketknife into the black rubber right under the "G". She had to push, leaning with all her weight, but eventually the blade made its way forward. She heard a hiss of escaping air into the cold night. The music from the party pounded the air. Elisa started to sweat. He had been distancing himself, nothing sinister so far, just somehow managing to not be home when she called, or not at the store when she dropped by. Elisa wasn't going to have that, and she smiled as his Corvette began to cant forward on the ruined tire.

15 comments:

  1. A woman scorned is definitely a sinister force.

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  2. Crazy chick alert! Watch out!

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  3. Nice reversal, I love seeing the perspective of the 'bad guy' because here in her mind her actions are totally within reason.

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  4. Why'd she stop with only one tire? ;)

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  5. sooo cool. i had no idea what the G was about... and you resolved it so quickly. bonus points for using the word "cant."

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  6. Oh my... she might regret that. Nice job in telling a story we can well imagine in 100 words.

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  7. Ya. Man. Why can't guys just be direct, eh?! (Um, in this case I think, because, SCARY! Yikes!

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  8. Ouch - She's the sinister one, all right.

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  9. Oh, who's sinister now? I liked the description of the blade sinking in, especially since it wasn't clear what she was cutting just yet. Nice one

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  10. Uh oh. Maybe they should just call it quits before sinister takes on a new meaning. Clever response.

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  11. Hmmmm. One of those "Hide the Knives" kinda women, eh?

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  12. She might regret it if his actions were to do something like plan a surprise birthday party for her, or worse a proposal!

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  13. Heh. Now that I'm commenting as a fellow writer of the 100 Words and not as a judge of Trifecta, I can say that I really, really loved this. It was in our final four this week. I love the woman scorned thing, and I really love when she's not even really that scorned. Just a little mad.

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